Table of contents
- General writing
- Writing in Art and Design
- Writing in Arts
- Writing in Business and Economics
- Writing in Education
- Writing in Engineering
- Writing in Information Technology
- Writing in Law
- Writing in Medicine
- Writing in Pharmacy
- Writing in Science
Sample conclusions
Read the following conclusions and select the best one for this report.
Example A
5.0 Conclusions
This report introduced two environmentally-friendly designs for a car. We presented information about the engine and fuel, materials, safety and accessories and provided sketches for each car. These cars would be more expensive than normal family cars, but it is important to develop cleaner technology for the future.
Example B
5.0 Conclusions
Two alternative designs for an emission-free fuel cell powered car have been presented: Car A, a luxury sedan which runs on hydrogen, and Car B, a medium-sized family hatch which uses hydrogen and oxygen. Each car features recyclable materials and conforms to Australian design standards in terms of performance and safety features. However, Car B is recommended as it was found to be more economical in terms of both manufacturing and running costs.
Which is the best conclusion for this report?
Example A
Example B
Example B is better.
Example A is weak because it does not restate the key features of the two designs. It does attempt to give a conclusion by pointing out that the cars are more expensive than cars based on current technology, but does not mention which aspects of the designs cause the extra expense. Moreover, it does not make any recommendation about which is the better design. The comment about the importance of developing cleaner technology belongs in the introduction, as it is establishes the need for the work done. Furthermore, the writer does not use impersonal language.
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